Can you read over the first bit of my novel and tell me what you think?

It's my first novel. I'm quite young but I thought I'd try writing something. I'm fourteen years old...that'll probably turn most of you away right there. But I'm very serious about my writing and would APPRECIATE IT SO MUCH, if you could check it out! ...I really want to be an author after I'm finished school!...... This is the link to it ----------> http://www.booksie.com/fantasy/novel/nessieandjake/tainted-crimson